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Steffan, you have a nice, clear speaking voice.
"A huge range" is great, but I don't know about "which will catch you and never go out of your mind." What about, which you remember forever?
Provides is a great word, but we don't want to over-use it. Synonyms: offers, affords, allows, permits, enables. Look up 3 more.
At this point, it is very clear that you are moving into a new phase of the piece: the attractions.
Even though it's spelled: Celtic, we pronounce it "Kel" "tick."
How do we pluralize the noun "wolf"?
You have a strong conclusion. Work on "I'm looking forward to meet you at Busch Gardens"
Julia, great introduction! Your openner really gets the reader/viewer's attention. Double-check the spelling on the slides.
What is the difference between 'holiday' and 'vacation?'
There is a clear trasition here. I know because when you restate the full name, Disneyland: Paris, it gives me a clue.
The verb here is Dining, prounounced Dine-ning.
Excellent use of statistics for emphasis; good Concrete Detail. What was your source?
"Disneyland is a place where..." is a great way to begin your conclusion. Great job!